Re: Clash...!
Posted by:
BadMan C-J (---.range86-142.btcentralplus.com)
Date: December 22, 2007 05:38PM
hitman ur droppin ok stuff some pointaz dnt chat false like "i ad sex wiv ur mum" u aint foolin no1 & two get urself dope b4 u chat about me coz im sure most of my friends on this site could rip ur stuff apart cos if u've not already noticed me , tha guyz and Rachii D own this site lyricaly, oh and b4 u say u say u'l kil me iv been in the pen 5 times 4 stabbin ppl so dnt fink im harmless cos i'm not so i've got a right to rap about it cos its true. So shut up and go clash someone who's of shitty talent as you cos u iz; chattin air, spittin bubbles, talkin ass and being false, Mc'in is about talkin about what is true and humiliation of your opponent.
in clashes; punches, personal hits and wordplay are needed, not false stuff like i bummed your mum. it can be easily flipped and you can have multiple punches on you for the sake of one line. DONT DO IT!!
in Opens (just dropping a story or a verse); you chat about true stuff like if u saw a fight a school picture yourself as one of the people. ect.. or if your having a ruff time in your life Mc about that and bitch about the bad fings to get it off your chest.
Don't chat false, it don't impress people at all! it just makes you a poor lyricist, poor MC, and an easy target cos if i was to post a verse or the sentence up in here with the 'I bummed your mum' line and ask for people to flip it, we could be here until 2010 flippin it, its just a poor attempt.
DONT DO IT
OH AN GET DOPE COS UR REALLY BAD COS UR LYRICS ARE PUNCHESLESS UNENTERTAININ AND BORING. Many people ave heard bars like what you've dropped before and they are so played out. fink of your own stuff and ways to improve try reading looking at some people in greece who Mc and listen to their flow and what they talk about and get ideas but don't copy cos people willl find you out and u'll be called 'Phoney' which i'm sure you wouldnt want to happen, just take your time in writing, dont try to write your lines quick as ur just a begginer and u miss vital keypoints in writing fast, whereas i've been writing Mc stuff for 5 years and my rhyming comes to me instantly, and it flows reasonably well when its read, but it'll sound dope when i spit it, but seriously, get your own flow and ur own wordplay and ways of wording your bars
You might prefer a basic Flow structure
T T T T A
T T T T A
or you might prefer a little longer with a multi.
T T T T T T T T A
T T T T A T T T A
its upto you its your style. dont copy some other mc's lyrics as its stupid and shows lack of lyricism Overall.
Hope its helps eventhough ur gettin a scolding about ur lyricism.
Oh and the bars you wrote were basic but had a Choppy Flow when read
if you can sort this out they would be ok.
If you were to take them and rewrite them, taking your time following these steps;
Take Out False stuff
Fill in Gaps
read
edit for choppy flow
read
edit for flow
try spittin to a beat (like oriental riddim which you can download on limewire or sumthin) and make it flow with the bass line beats. Keep it
If your off(doesnt match bassline beats) change the off bars
post it
This method should help you realise what sound and flows good and what doesnt =D
And in no time ( 4-6 drops) everything you spit will have reasonably good content and flow.
Keep up Man
Edited 1 times. Last edit at 12/23/07 08:04AM by BadMan C-J.