YAH MAN SHURUP LISTEN STAND STILL N STAY,
DNT WANA HEAR ANYMORE BULLSHIT JUS LISTEN 2WOT I SAY,
MAN I AINT EVEN START CLASHIN I CAN C U WANA START 2 PRAY,
COZ DIS LYRICAL SOLJA IS LYRICALLY READY 4 CLASH ANY DAY,

U MUS B TINKIN IM CHATTIN SHIT U MUS B TINKIN IM GAY,
JUS LISTEN TO WAH I SAY COZ I’LL B SPITTIN A WHOLE ESSAY,
MY BARS R RARE SO PAY ATTENTION COZ I SPIT NEW BARS EVRIDAY,
JUS TO LET U KNO IVE MASTERD DA FLOW I DNT GET STUCK HALFWAY,


help me put if u can plzzz

Moh that drop was better than anything i've seen you drop its got a med. pace flow which was nice and no forced anything good drop man keep it up but remember the syllable trick

They are good man, pretty sick actually.
What you think of these Barz:
?

Im sweet wen I flow like Sugar in Tea/
I get cross like a Hybrid Hornet Bee/
Stright from the Endz of the City E/
Yeh im on the bounce like a big Black Flea/

Im spittin on the Riddim/
Like Pytons wid the Venom/
Im Shottin plus im Spittin/
Yeh blud, this man this aint Kiddin/

Mite be Rappin, neva Singin/
Shootin manz that are Lippin/
Like a pill u are Trippin/
Stop that and start Grippin/

Im gettin hot like a Kettle/
Plus im hard like im Metal/
Ill plant fists on ur Bonse/
And im stingin like a Nettle/





Edited 2 times. Last edit at 05/22/08 04:26PM by MCK.

MCK your wack as fuck dude... your verses have no flow... or consistancy at that

try to make your 4 bars flow on from one an other, because you need to keep punching at your opponent, and bigin urself up in the mean time, read your verse again, and you see what i mean.

Bruv I appreciate the comments but it aint meant to be any particular type of rhyme ya know.

It was just a few Barz I wrote, they aint intended for Clashing manz.

I do see what you mean man but I think ur wrong about them having no flow.
I can flow them pretty well wen reading em.

But safe anywayz

not when your reading i mean...

Mite be Rappin, neva Singin/
Shootin manz that are Lippin/
Like a pill u are Trippin/
Stop that and start Grippin/

Im gettin hot like a Kettle/
Plus im hard like im Metal/
Ill plant fists on ur Bonse/
And im stingin like a Nettle/

where is the fuckin link between Grippin and Kettle?

its dont make sense, if u wanna go big you needa make ur lyrics make sense from 1st of 16 to 16 of 16

Ok man I can see what you mean about them not flowing maybe cos of how they are written rite, but this is something ive tried to do myself. No1 has ever shown me how to do lyrics and that so maybe thats why. I can flow these good to a beat and they sound fine to me, but i like listen to oher people opinion and I dnt know anything bou u but u seem to have a strong opinion and that must mean something.

And yer 'Grippin' and 'Kettle' aint meant to be related or nuttin, thats why the barz are in lines of 4. 'Trippin' and 'Grippin' are the words which are meant to relate to eachother.

Do you reckon u could maybe give me an example of how u mean like some barz u have written or something.

anywayz man safe.



Edited 1 times. Last edit at 05/23/08 12:02PM by MCK.

Search Lyricstalk grime mandem on last few pages for examples read mine, Radikulus, Ekzaa, and Kamikaze MS. nd u'l see wat i mean

Lryt man ill go look at em, blessed.

hope you improve... (like that'll hapen)