yooo these r ma first barz ive writtin can eney 1 help nd give a few pointers coz i wuld like 2 inprove thanks :)

yooo i roll with a shank
bruv ur barzzz r wank
i put p's in the bank
bruv ur nasty havin a sperm bank

dunt chat shit like ur a man
c bruv ur a lil kid tryin 2 b stan
ive got connections everywere like w lan
c bruv dunt cum 2 ma endz without a game plan

lol ya know what blud, watch me kill you in 4 barz lol. Nice try though.

Im not Stan bruv, but get me im Handy.
I roll widda Stanley. not a little kid mate.
thats you and im Manley, I'll bet any P's.
that you still watch Bambi and shit wid ya Family.

safe

Zoop Zooooooop

Yo g u got a handy rhyme scheme n dat styl but u dnt no how to flow it bruv true say i can improve dem, its nuffin blud

i roll deep wiv a butterfly shank
ill merk u wiv interest like barclays bank
u aint movin nowhere but im topa da rank
i jus improved ur barz no need to fank


see don i got ma own bars styl

n its J.K.I.D its not wiley
rollin on road wiv ma team rite by me
see its dat white boy, 15 yers old
get me vex n ma heart turn cold
mite see me in ya enz all blacked out
bally on da face n i buss da strap out
my bars r smart dey deserve n a*
most wanted youths r ahead by far
blud lemme chek a schedule
u will get left wiv a nxt day funral
don im a g not a clown
i will turn ur smile up side down
rrr dis is jus sufferin
u wud get backed up and left stuterin
dis is da end cuz ive ran out of lead
so i hope dis 16's stuck in ya hed

see don dats da kind of bars manziz lukin to be dealin wiv kool -1-

Blud are u chattin to me about flow? if so then ur trippin cos my flow is alott.

kool ppl i no this sounds deep but can u help me rite sum barzzz ? if u can holla



bleesssssssssssssagggeee

yes blud I will help u out, tell me wat u want n its blessed ok cuzzy.

wb

ok i wnt sum barzz bout me really ok this is a few things bout me

my nickname is shires i live in boro i jam up queenz way on thirlmere or bowness or playing football nd spittin on buttermere nd im 14 got connections all over england ma main manz r reepa creepz streekz blake dats it really fam kool 4 helpin me bless culd it b bout a 16 bar but i wnt it propa short sentencis

dude i could write something up which would go nice with a slow hip hop beat, nothin grimey... but it''ll be all true

I will if ya want cuzzy, but if i were u Id let CJ do it instead as he offered.
he knows alot and could help u more innit, Ill still do it though if u want?

wb

Safe.