Wht about u bth writing bars n then Tempa cn take bits from each n put his personal mark on it.
Might help u a bit more Tempa coz its all about practice, n if these man write ur bars u aint thinking n growing as an artist.
If u take bits frm each n fil th rest urself then it'll allow u t improve with ur own style while been supported by a bit more creative lines/ideas n structure from Ceej n MCK.

Jst an idea tho ha, aint like am tryna control it.
Al be happy t help n all if need be.

Stay kl
x

*Dont fuck about, trust! Girl Got Game*

ye that wuld b kool(:

but ppl can they b short barz so my flow goes in with the beat coz i spit 2 slow beatz so my flows slow enet


bless1

First 8 barz

Blud Shires is da name, betta learn up Quicktime.
Bare links from the endz saved on my Phoneline.
Big up Reepa, Creeps, Streeks and my Bloodline.
Its never Hometime, Cos ima Street man Jammin
in Queenz, Thirlmere and Bowness. Im Plannin.
to Repeat my street actions on the Microphone.
Man in the Endz know I will put Strap to ya Dome.
I kick Ball in the Park and ya Know, That im Sho.

Second 8 Bars

IM KNOWN IN THE ENDZ, BY THE NAME SHIRE
I DNT TALK AIR, MAN AINT A HAIRDRYER
BUT I WANNA BE A BUYER, SO I CAME TO
THIS FORUM TO SEARCH OUT AND HIRE
MCS WHO SPIT THE REAL FIRE. SEARCH OVER
I GOT EM, MCK AND CJ ARE TO HOT AND
NOW IM GONNA GET THE DOPE SHIT DROPPIN
SOON ILL BE TOPPIN, WNT SEE SHIRE FLOPPIN.

Third 4 Bars

I CAME IN THE GAME, ACTING ALL SILLY
TOOK ON MANZ, BUT I FLOPPED LIKA WILLY.
DIDNT GET THE MILLI, PRACTICED SPITTIN
NOW IM NOT FLAT, IM GETTIN A BIT HILLY


As you can see these aint exactly the best Bars but that was my purpose, these are about the rite sorta complexity level for you atm. and the last 4 barz are meant to be complete shite, they jus there to give u a flow that I want u to finish off, make it into 8 bars ok.

Try to rewrite/reword all of it to suit u, keepin my flow though and see if u can do that. if u can then I will help u write big barz.

safe

omg mck ur flow is actually wokring for me thanks a bunch (:


ye ill finsih that 4 bar 2 a 8 but ill do it l8er ye kool

now u can help me write the big barz ;) lol

blessage

yeh ok Blud but sho me ur bars first wen u do em and den I will see if ur ready to rite bigger bars

BLUD PASS ME THE RIZLA, PASS ME THE SKIN.
GOTTA STRAP IT FAT, I DNT GO FOR THE SLIM.
CAN I GET A POKEY, CAN I GET A PEN.
TO MUCH WEEDS FALLIN OUT OF DA END.
NOW ALL TAPPED DOWN AND ALL ROLLED STRAIGHT.
U GOTTA A FAT ZOOT, STRAPPED UP ON UR PLATE.
START GETTIN BUNNED OUT, START GETTIN HIGH.
AND JUS LIKE THE SMOKE I FLY IN THE SKY.

BLUD PASS ME THE BLADE OR PASS ME THE KNIFE.
ILL MASH UP UR FACE AND ILL TAKE UR LIFE.
THESE DAYS BARE MAN DNT OPERATE RITE.
THATS WHY IM USUALLY INVOLVED INNA FIGHT.
LEAVE U BURIED IN THE MUD, UNDER THE SOIL.
AIMED FOR UR CHEST BUT THE GAT RECOILS.
SO UR HEAD GOT SHOT GOT POPPED LIKA BOIL.
U USE TO BE MY BOY BUT U TURNED DISLOYAL

here play with this flow aswell, mite help u understand flowin ur own ones better.

yh i can work with that flow (:

cheers mck



blessup

IM NOT LATIN LIKE VICKING
C UR HEAD MY FOOT WILL B STRICKING
LIKE WE YA GURL WILL GET GRINDIN
ON MY DIK EVERY NIGHT IN

LIFE IS SHORT AT THE END OF THE DAY
BUT WHAT I DO IS MY DESICION PPL DUNT LIKE IT
BUT DEY DUNT C IT IN SHIRES VISION
ND IF U ENT SAILING IM ON MY OWN BOAT LIKE NOAH
IM QUICK IN THIS GAME ND UR MUCH SLOWA

tempa ur chattin breeze, keep it real...

cj i ent chattin brezze i cum on this website 2 write my barz nd get sum help nd pointers so i can improve