yh ok then...

LIKE WE YA GURL WILL GET GRINDIN
ON MY DIK EVERY NIGHT IN

like that will be true...!

its filler and breeze

cj man sayin im chattin breeze nd dat i ent been on dis ting 4 long sa yano just learing enit nd if u dunt like dem den just say how i can improve dem or even help me enit :S simple


kepp blessed ye ?

Nah bruv sorry to say it, but CJ is rite. Dem bars r swag man, u could do better than dat if u tried to man.

Come on show me somthing good.

safe cuz.

ok listen ye

im game on the run wit no fatigue
2 many disappear if i do ill prestige
4 knowledge im on my grind like shivering teeth
i get consistently like a broken record on repeat
extraordinary gentlemen is out of my league
skull a bones cant figure wat i intrigue
im so sinister my sleeves holds conspiracies
of wat Illuminati is destined in need
but i aint evil im good like mr deeds
naw dat was weak a fluctuated orgasm i mean
like the sheik as r kelly dey want my pee
im out like da stopped heart on beat
turn nothin into somethin jus like magic
deafeatin niggaz on da mic lookz so tragic
da name iz DueceTruce but i aint countin
my money pourz out just like fountainz
stackin up higher den unclimbable mountains
produce trax dat get da club bouncin
i make left turnz but do them the right way
i burn niggaz like bluntz left in an ashtray
armed robbery iz one of da least of my crimez
cuz my rhymez are soo lethal dat dey kill my linez
Ain't heard bout me?
listen 2 ma anthem,
Boi can bus beta moves than George Sampson,
Life's tuf like a marathon,
But i gotta stay thru cos il keep on havin them,
they keep repeatin like a 3yr olds tantrums,
b4 u start ur reactionz,
beta kno i roll wid the holy fantom,
i gotta mirror Godz actionz,
nuf sed,

my flow is coming along but the barz need 2 b short like the 1's above (:


eney wayz blessup

Yeh u are makin an Improvement temps, but i dnt see how u class them as shorts bars blud. They have alot of words compact into each bar. Its a good start, do another drop but go over it after u wrote it and count syllables etc. then adjust until it sounds sick.

ok these are shorter barz ye they are chatting air but o well

j dot s spit devilish, thunder
try clash me put ya, 6 feet under
ya dun no
im a merky, younga
get in beef am at the front like a, fronter
ur at the back like a backer
slip a shank in ya chest like sharp skin, dagger
ull get rolled like rizzla,wrapper


kool

I can see ur makin good use of my Flow bruv, keep practicing and try not writin air bars next time.

That is my flow aint it bruv, u got it from this:

I'll merk ur boat and leave u inna Blunder
Put u inna Box and ur 6 feet under
U dnt know that i come like thunder
Wen u get merked then it aint no wonder

Try this ting with me ok, fill in the Blank bars in this 8 drop cuz:

Im so E17, No wat I mean!
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Its a Badman Ting Jack bare bling,
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Boy tried talk but hes just 17
Wen I find you, ya mite see 17
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Bless up.

MCK Wrote:
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> Try this ting with me ok, fill in the Blank bars
> in this 8 drop cuz:
>
> Im so E17, No wat I mean!
> Rep east london where mans blze green
> take me a friend n ill merk ure team
> Its a Badman Ting Jack bare bling,
> im a lyrical king no wat i mean!
> Boy tried talk but hes just 17
> Wen I find you, ya mite see 17
> stars flyin like a cartoon scene

I tried but to many 17s init lol!