Rite now i feel lean as f*** so i fort id try a bitta hip-hop
http://youtube.com/watch?v=HRNtqOmygSM&feature=related <<<listen n read \/
its charged ima white boi so lets see your bois manage
ma oxford mandem n the young stars damage
imagine da footage of your blood n its spillage
Stop droppin pillage cause its killin your image
listen to ma message or the drugs ell take a hostage
stop movin dat package n move along a passage
of wisdom n enlighten me wid you newly found knowledge
fuck goin savage n runnin ya mout on myspace
cause sum man ell come up n put you in your place
its a faze we all engage but you gotta stay strong till the end of your days
jus blaze remain dazed bt dnt get your path hazed
by jealous cats cause in the end its the street dat pays
your ways, wid eyes glazed on the mic i sprayz
ill erase cats for bringin negative rays
ima fast like sleigh with lyrical essays that portrays
himself to ladys to be sweet like sundaes
but inside im a cold boi dat will serve you up like souffles
Flip this shit cause your a boi dat prays
his bois he betrays cause a back stabbin bredrin
dnt deserve to graze on the fields of truth n repect
so let me erect a question for a reject
of this life n the next take my shit into effect
cause you an insect n this scene you infect
Ma first time doin hip hop so im lookin for constructive points ya get me, obviously negs but dnt get hyp!!
Yeh Cuz I think its good, goes well to dat beat standard. the only criticism id give to it is that some of the words dnt rhyme with the others properly.
eg:
Hostage - knowledge
These work.
Passage - Myspace
These dnt.
Got alot of multi's goin on in that drop though, so yeh its blessed.
lets take a trip down memory lane
you know the days when foes dint exist n pain
wernt a ting on ure name, its a shame
dat we used to be bois now were at war in da game
used to be me u n syks in the chain
but you broke the link, got left in the rain
you stuck a knife in ma back its insane
y a boi for life would do it, now i jus kain
a zoot to ma j's, im goin on mainstream
bringin in da cream not jammin doin beans
fukin dik'ed chattin shit, ill remove spleens
teams against teams mine wins you fiend
im shining like sheen you ent nuttin on me
when ma boi jakd you all he got was 50p
broke as cunt lets see you compete
wid ma flow on the beat,
you better change ya sheet
cause dat day ya went away i had ya gals feet
over ma shoulders, i drained ma balls on ya covers
we made love like were lovers
oh so now the truth uncovers
we used to be like brothers
but im makin moves like the others
you pussy cluts i giv you all da shuddas
piss ya pants n make you run to ya mothers
unfortunatly i dint see u for ya true colours
give it a year n youll be resting under flowers!